if i had two nits about this it would be; one simile to many.
like
pennies in a church
poor box, or fists on the
breast of a drowning man.
and;
Back then I thought that love
and sex existed but
in one pairing, that pots
for me the verse starting with "and" feels weak, would;
Back then I thought
that love and sex existed but
in one pairing, that pots
other than that i can only admire the language here and how you use it.
---------------I hold a
martini and once, when
I was young, high heels
adorned my "dainty" feet,
the imagery is abosulte, and this is just one of many.
obviously a train of thought poem, better than most i've read.
and worthy of publishing.
thanks for the read as always jack.
like
pennies in a church
poor box, or fists on the
breast of a drowning man.
and;
Back then I thought that love
and sex existed but
in one pairing, that pots
for me the verse starting with "and" feels weak, would;
Back then I thought
that love and sex existed but
in one pairing, that pots
other than that i can only admire the language here and how you use it.
---------------I hold a
martini and once, when
I was young, high heels
adorned my "dainty" feet,
the imagery is abosulte, and this is just one of many.
obviously a train of thought poem, better than most i've read.
and worthy of publishing.
thanks for the read as always jack.