10-04-2010, 02:16 AM
This is my favourite from your work by far. I've always been attracted to poems which use images of light, and focus on simple but potent ideas, in short and succinct verse, so perhaps my adoration is a bit subjective, but nonetheless, this is magnificent. I really want to critique it, but I can't. It's just very very very good. If I had written it, I would have placed a colon after "floor," and a comma following the second "balcony," but they're merely minor aesthetic choices, and don't affect my enjoyment of this piece.