10-03-2010, 07:55 AM
Your imagery is just excellent... you've got a real gift for language, with the skill and depth of someone writing for years. At points it's a rant poem, but your use of image stops it short of being overbearing.
I don't think the parentheses you put in your closing lines is at all necessary, though that's just me.
Great read!
I don't think the parentheses you put in your closing lines is at all necessary, though that's just me.
Great read!
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?