Urbanised by William Marsland.

[Bianca Alabaster]

Billy: I'm not much at the critique thing but here are my thoughts...
Title is great!

A countryside of sorts
arrives in a flurry on the fifteenth floor
finches, mating pairs. >>> 1st stanza excellente'

Flitting from balcony to concrete balcony
darting, diving, weaving
through paint peeled drab, playing
catch-up on the wing.

>>> my edit would be:::
Flitting from balcony to
concrete balcony
darting and weaving
through paint-peeled drab,
playing catch-up
on the wing.


when they alight outside the window
their light dissolves the tragedy of towers.

I like your use of the bird's energy as light, perfectly fine to me.
but alight and light is very similar, could use "glory" instead of light as in
their glory dissolves the tragedy of towers.

thanks for a good poem