Grand Dad's Time parts 1, and 2.

[billy]

That was heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing.

Instead of separating with "this is what really happened", I think you should number the poem (Part I. , then Part II.), and I guess you could title the second part as Part II. What really happened... something like that.

The only line I disliked was in the first part... "a silent tear of joy did its perfunctory trickle"... perfunctory just sounds too formal, almost antiseptic.

Nicely done

i'll sort that out later addy. thanks for the comment