06-26-2010, 10:28 AM
I tend to stay away from writing love poems. And leave it up to experts. Because, I've never experienced or been in love. So, I wouldn't know what to say. To me, it seems like you're a beginner. Which is no problem. We all have to start some place. Anyway, it's not that love poems aren't good, they are usually cliche. And cheesy. Certain words you should avoid.. "heart, pieces.. and etc.. This seems to me someone who experienced unrequited love? and is suffering a broken heart. It would have been better, had it been a metaphor.
Your poem has potential , yet lacks. It lacks imagery(which is very important) especially in Love poems(IMO) though. Also, you need to structure your poem better. Decide if you want stanza's or what? Fix this up and you're good.
Loveblind.
Your poem has potential , yet lacks. It lacks imagery(which is very important) especially in Love poems(IMO) though. Also, you need to structure your poem better. Decide if you want stanza's or what? Fix this up and you're good.
Loveblind.