06-23-2010, 05:03 PM
The first stanza WINS. I know a few people who are EXACTLY like that. I'm not sure I'm completely comfortable with the last two lines; they sound good together, but I feel that putting a space between them gives it a pause dramatic enough to show the fury that you're trying to both express and hold back.
I'm not sure if I'm making any sense ^^;
I'm not sure if I'm making any sense ^^;