06-19-2010, 08:51 PM
Love this one, probably one of my favorites of yours.You use words like a surgeon uses a scalpel 
My very, very minor comment would be that I wouldn't have chosen it to end where it did. It felt like a tense line, which was at odds with the 'letting go' vibe implicit in the poem. (But then again, maybe my interpretation of the line is tainted, where it sounds desperate even though it isn't meant to be)
My very, very minor comment would be that I wouldn't have chosen it to end where it did. It felt like a tense line, which was at odds with the 'letting go' vibe implicit in the poem. (But then again, maybe my interpretation of the line is tainted, where it sounds desperate even though it isn't meant to be)
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?