06-09-2010, 08:50 AM
I love the theme of this poem. Love those first lines! ("Count your blessings... Name them one by one...")
If I had one teeny criticism, I'd replace some of the nature imagery you put in (which seems to be the most represented in the poem) with more concrete examples of those pets, places, and people you mentioned in passing. That way it would seem that you very deliberately, and very prayerfully, counting each piece of blessing, just like how you count and pluck the petals of the white daisy (tying it in as your more or less last image
)
If I had one teeny criticism, I'd replace some of the nature imagery you put in (which seems to be the most represented in the poem) with more concrete examples of those pets, places, and people you mentioned in passing. That way it would seem that you very deliberately, and very prayerfully, counting each piece of blessing, just like how you count and pluck the petals of the white daisy (tying it in as your more or less last image
)
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?