Afraid of the night
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(09-01-2026, 04:17 AM)busker Wrote:  Afraid of the night

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Childhood is afraid
of the night, the thin hands
of malevolent ghosts. Youth is unafraid
of the night, with its host
of stars like sheep, in the land 
of a pale goddess the moon.

Mid life is afraid 
not of night, but the soon
coming dawn, upending 
respite and dreams of the past
where it hides from the future, no not a friend.

Old age is afraid 
of the night once again, 
of the one 
with no light,
with no end.
The sounds are good, in both the mouth and the ear.  Maybe look at the meter --- half of the lines think they're supposed to sound metrical, and half seem free or uncertain.
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Messages In This Thread
Afraid of the night - by busker - 09-01-2026, 04:17 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by opal.zzz - 09-01-2026, 05:16 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by matsunosuperfan - 09-01-2026, 05:52 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by busker - 09-01-2026, 07:10 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by matsunosuperfan - 09-02-2026, 03:49 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by busker - 09-02-2026, 11:12 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by wasellajam - 09-02-2026, 08:39 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by busker - 09-03-2026, 12:46 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by Bunx - 09-04-2026, 07:31 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by matsunosuperfan - 09-04-2026, 04:26 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by wasellajam - 09-04-2026, 07:01 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by Luckieman - 09-21-2026, 08:07 PM
RE: Afraid of the night - by busker - 09-22-2026, 08:02 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by Luckieman - 09-25-2026, 05:10 AM
RE: Afraid of the night - by purplie - 11-05-2026, 03:28 AM



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