10-30-2026, 11:33 AM
I find the whole white space writing style to be gimmicky and particularly ill suited to poetry read on a screen.
The absence of punctuation here is gimmicky too. E e Cummings tried it and it works for certain kinds of poems. Here it’s just a distraction.
I couldn’t get past the distraction. There’s something going on, but I didn’t find it worthwhile to invest the extra time. Nothing in the lines truly stands out at first glance, and the form puts one off giving it a closer read
That would be my feedback
The absence of punctuation here is gimmicky too. E e Cummings tried it and it works for certain kinds of poems. Here it’s just a distraction.
I couldn’t get past the distraction. There’s something going on, but I didn’t find it worthwhile to invest the extra time. Nothing in the lines truly stands out at first glance, and the form puts one off giving it a closer read
That would be my feedback