Yesterday, 08:17 AM
This is a good exercise, crndl
To your point about the line by line, I agree.
Most line by line crits aren’t really going to focus on every line. If you’re trying to focus on every line then you’re just spouting garbage.
Take this, for instance:
Quiet, but air conditioning's humming... use a word other than 'but'; 'save for' is an example
Is being unnecessarily pedantic. Not everything is worth commenting on.
So the message for DeorAna, I think, would be not to try too hard to critique or write.
Two crits a week are about enough. And he should practice in the poetry practice threads.
To your point about the line by line, I agree.
Most line by line crits aren’t really going to focus on every line. If you’re trying to focus on every line then you’re just spouting garbage.
Take this, for instance:
Quiet, but air conditioning's humming... use a word other than 'but'; 'save for' is an example
Is being unnecessarily pedantic. Not everything is worth commenting on.
So the message for DeorAna, I think, would be not to try too hard to critique or write.
Two crits a week are about enough. And he should practice in the poetry practice threads.