09-24-2026, 12:15 PM
There are some strange word choices here - annum, sky-tied, moonshine, etc and the punctuation makes it harder to follow.
If you’re translating from the original, then it reads almost like a word for word.
I wouldn’t suggest that you rewrite it entirely, but it has to work in the English idiom
If you’re translating from the original, then it reads almost like a word for word.
I wouldn’t suggest that you rewrite it entirely, but it has to work in the English idiom