A Gardeners Fall

[matsunosuperfan]

Went for another pass at the poem taking suggestions from both of you.

Ella- hopefully the changes make a more vivid picture of the garden hustle. In the original I was trying to get the illusion of a worker going from spot to spot, but that is hard to get across.
Also hope all is well in your world!

MSF- hopefully you find more to like with this edit. I feel like I do want to write a similar poem that is more abstract and doesn't spell out the themes. That could wait for another time though. Thanks for the feedback

Hey great reviz. More specific notes to follow. Good job (y)