Yesterday, 11:50 PM
Went for another pass at the poem taking suggestions from both of you.
Ella- hopefully the changes make a more vivid picture of the garden hustle. In the original I was trying to get the illusion of a worker going from spot to spot, but that is hard to get across.
Also hope all is well in your world!
MSF- hopefully you find more to like with this edit. I feel like I do want to write a similar poem that is more abstract and doesn't spell out the themes. That could wait for another time though. Thanks for the feedback
Ella- hopefully the changes make a more vivid picture of the garden hustle. In the original I was trying to get the illusion of a worker going from spot to spot, but that is hard to get across.
Also hope all is well in your world!
MSF- hopefully you find more to like with this edit. I feel like I do want to write a similar poem that is more abstract and doesn't spell out the themes. That could wait for another time though. Thanks for the feedback
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--mark twain
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--mark twain
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