The grand themes

[milo]

I found it fake, for the following reasons:
The first line of S2 clarifies that the poem js no longer going to be about S1 but escaping the grand themes
The tech bro / Musk / Trump / Tusk connection - legitimately tied up - is dismissed as “contemporary”. What’s the problem with it being that?
The part about self deprecation vs flourish - why can’t it be both?
It’s just observations that are legit on the surface because they are well written

The only criticism I find valid is that “it’s not memorable”. Ok.
It misses the fact that “heat death of the universe” is borderline Reddit cliche

But it’s interesting to see that two other people agreed with the AI. That’s good to know.

It can be tough for writers to separate themselves from their work

I noticed most of the same things the AI did - perhaps your message isn't coming across in your writing.

Sorry if my comment causes the thread to be split as it’s not specifically about this poem but I have to say:

I rather write a poem that one person took into their heart and mind, faults and all, than write something that can pass through a machine and come out clean. I understand the machine has eaten all poetic knowledge available, it’s just I don’t think it’s important to get a gold star from it as much as it’s important to bridge the gap between the poet and the reader. Even injudicious use of human crit can wreck a poem if it drains it of its spark, we’ve all seen that. I’d advise caution.

as I already stated earlier in the thread:

Now, of course, this site is dedicated to real human feedback from real human readers and I wouldn't normally post AI feedback but in this case, the author requested it

and also, this is the logic fallacy of the false dichotomy  - it assumes that a poem will either please an AI or a human reader but not both or neither