And there you are.

[matsunosuperfan]

Thank you for taking the trouble to comment. I tend to agree the first stanza doesn't contribute a lot and needs editing to get over my dodgy astronomy. I might consider deleting it entirely and starting at "And there you are". 

Thanks again.

Oh, please try that. That sounds immediately better when I read it that way. We enter with a sense of surprise and immediacy. It's compelling