Small Memoriam - edit

[dukealien]

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 But the actual action of how the mouse dies is left implied. If anything, I'm inclined to think it would be more powerful to reverse that. 

Thanks for sharing your work with me <3

Thank you for the very good critique.  I'll work on applying the advice, though it may take a bit of time.

But believe me, and I tell you three times, you do *not* want to know how this mouse died.  I've killed animals (including mice) without regret, but this one upset me.