New Dawn edit 2

[JohnS]

When the morning sun broke through
the smoke from the cooking fires
which lay like a blanket over the township,
the skyline of distant Johannesburg
glowed like molten gold.

Daniel stepped down from the bus,  ... I would prefer to have a couple of lines about Daniel's background that justify giving him a name in this poem. The name shows up twice, but the                                                        ... person may as well be anonymous
and joined a line that snaked sinuously  ... tautological
towards the tin-roofed school house
sitting below the kopje,
in a field more dirt than grass.

The line shimmied forward,
as people sang and toyi-toyied,
bare feet slapping the hard-packed earth. ...these are some good lines
For hour after hour it moved,
determined,
unstoppable,
inevitable.

A sign above the door - polling station.
Daniel made his choice.
A cross - so simple to make,
so hard to win the right to make.

After, Daniel stood on the school house steps,
raised his arms and cried,
Amandla! (power)
And those in the line responded,
Awethu! (to us)

It was April 26, 1994. ... This could be the title instead of an 'explanation' at the bottom

Hi JohnS - some great lines in the middle. You could polish this up into something quite nice.

Thank you, Busker,
I appreciate your comments, which I'll take into account when editing.