05-10-2026, 08:22 AM
(05-09-2026, 09:59 AM)RiverNotch Wrote: Thanks for the feedback. Altered the repeated line to make the narrative a little more clear. As for the title and the narrative's source:Did a lil research and read a bit of a monologue by Sigismundo. I think it would be interesting to see a version of your piece from the 1st person POV of one of the characters. The narration does still feel a tad bit cold.

