04-27-2026, 10:05 PM
I think you're onto something, I had to look up occultation and it can be astronomical or gardening
(04-25-2026, 02:18 AM)alonso ramoran Wrote: Occultation maybe an eclipse or blocking out the sun
Quiet how the sun is leaving me Im imagining nightfall
with shades of color not pitch black, maybe soothing
faded. Shades, too, will disappear foreknowledge? Is this actually the present,
with all my friends are the friends with us now, camping maybe
and the adults are we children? This is a little haunting
and you are still dead?
nowhere to be seen.missing or disappeared with the sun. Are the friends and adults also missing
What else to do but read. In the dark?
What else to do but listen to the cicadas
in late summer heat.
You should know
how new the world is to me,
that I would have so many questions Im just saying i have so many questions, you probly don't need to say it
yet the shadows from the pines
are reaching
as if other matters
were more urgent to you. Maybe you are camping with friends,
My long dark shape my shape is very confusing, I've no idea what to imagine
a smaller fear,
the shadows chant
answers, in exchange
for commitment of the body
to an unseen role,
rewarded with pleasure in lights;
chanting– spooky delving deeper
yesterday is a tail
the mouth of tomorrow is swallowing
if time is a circle, ergo,
today is for consuming
as the caterpillar of the leaf,
so the self of knowledge.
As a chant I think this section could do with a little more monotonous meter to feel like a chant
We were supposed to read
the book I was reading, too many pronouns here about the reading
home together. I’ll look for you
one last time. Sudden ending, I like the vibe of everything but some places are hard for me to form concrete images, I can relate to the yearning, loss and looking, the chant is such a specific portion of the poem, Ill chalk it all up to a dream. Hope this helps!
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