04-12-2026, 02:15 PM
(04-03-2026, 03:23 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: my comments are in italics
Silver and Gold
They scoured the top of a mountain then hollowed it out you start out with black humour and your ending is great but in between the grim humour gets diluted in a didactic tone. Was that your intention?
and when it began to collapse, they stuffed it full
of cement they acquired by popping open the top
of other, lesser mountains---ones that were not
endowed by the Lord with silver---while on the other if the silver and gold were dedicated to heathen gods why would they think the Lord had a hand in it? Feels contradictory not so?
side of the country, they carved out a massive notch
into a basin's edge, draining its lake
to gather up what gold the natives squandered
by offering to false gods. All this they did did you mean "offering it'? Is the word it missing here?
by forcing the heathen to work, at first as slaves
and then as little better, the wretches dying
in droves to the miner's phthisis or to quicksilver
poisoning their minds. Is this why some
revere the cross that cold Columbus brought "cold" needs unpacking or replacing perhaps
as more than a consolation? When Christ said faith
could move a mountain, was this what he meant? brilliant last thought