Dangling Past Participle (edit)

[wasellajam]

I like the poem! S1 and S2 are light and whimsical, each with a simple metaphor. In S3 the tone changes and becomes a little more dramatic, it doesn't feel like it connects with the rest of the poem.

Thanks, True.

Maybe your earworms don't wear masks but mine are sneaky fuckers, ofter with hidden identities.  But I get what you're saying about jumbled metaphors. Is it my fault the past is such an asshole and a sloppy poet to boot? (um, yes, I guess it is)

And sometimes, not often, I'd like to slap the past silly, but I hear you, gonna take the poem and reshuffle with your comments in mind, see what happens.

Really appreciate the read, thought and crit !!!!

Oh it's just my opinion. I have often been wrong, especially about earworms. lol ; )

Never hurts to try an edit, the play’s the thing, thanks for something to think about.