Ode To MP3 Players

[jaw_me]

Nice poem, I like the idea, however wrong it may seem, of a song having a 'smell'

and although I really like the imagery at the end my first thought was, "can you get orange molasses?"

is 'a kind of magic' cliché? probably not if it was in quotation marks, then I would see it as a musical reference to the Queen song.

Welcome to the site,
Cheers for the read.

Thank you for the feedback   , I haven't heard the Queen song but I'll def check it out. 

I see what you mean about "it's a kind of magic" being a cliche, but if it's fine asides from
that I think I'd prefer to keep it as is, I'm trying to break my habit of going for the most shocking turn of phrase  

I'd honestly never heard of orange molasses either but I wanted a partial rhyme with glass 
so yeah, forcing the rhyme really came back to bite me

Thanks again !