03-30-2026, 09:19 PM
How long before the masquerade
dissolves before your lover’s eye,
one night, a month or twenty years?
I'm glad you kept the opening in the revision
The shell will crack and out will ooze
the suffocated residue
of who you were before the sham.
hmm? a different word for sham?
How long before she hates herself
for falling for a surface laid
upon a turd of misery
who wooed her with a sticky net
disguised as loving empathy?
The bolded part may be the strongest lines in this poem
But you won’t fret about her fall,
your weakened prey has been the point.
So why the look of pained surprise
when finally she extricates
herself, relieved to fly away?
Solid ending, from the persspective of the N.
Sometimes poems just write themselves, eh?
dissolves before your lover’s eye,
one night, a month or twenty years?
I'm glad you kept the opening in the revision
The shell will crack and out will ooze
the suffocated residue
of who you were before the sham.
hmm? a different word for sham?
How long before she hates herself
for falling for a surface laid
upon a turd of misery
who wooed her with a sticky net
disguised as loving empathy?
The bolded part may be the strongest lines in this poem
But you won’t fret about her fall,
your weakened prey has been the point.
So why the look of pained surprise
when finally she extricates
herself, relieved to fly away?
Solid ending, from the persspective of the N.
Sometimes poems just write themselves, eh?