Well wishes
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(03-27-2026, 06:43 AM)jeanelyking Wrote:  
Smiley dateline='[url=tel:1773874150' Wrote:  1773874150[/url]']
A poetic potion 

Flows with emotion

With Peace love and happiness

This is how i bless

My secret confess

No more pain or stress



I wish them all things good

I would feed them all if i could

Make everything to be as it should
idk much about poem critiquing but i really liked this! it reminded me of the warm aura from that one angel of an aunty that all the cousins love, especially with the “i would feed them all if i could”; that gave it a real maternal and genuine feel. 

quite short and sweet, and i think it should be. only real critique i could think of is maybe being more adventurous with the adjectives used, and possibly leaning more into the maternal/nurturing personification of ‘well wishes’. i hope that makes sense lol.
It does make sense and the feedback is appreciated! Smile
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Messages In This Thread
Well wishes - by Smiley - 03-19-2026, 07:49 AM
RE: Well wishes - by ilovewomenandbeer - 03-19-2026, 08:42 AM
RE: Well wishes - by Smiley - 03-19-2026, 08:54 AM
RE: Well wishes - by wasellajam - 03-19-2026, 09:04 AM
RE: Well wishes - by Smiley - 03-19-2026, 10:12 AM
RE: Well wishes - by jeanelyking - 03-27-2026, 06:43 AM
RE: Well wishes - by Smiley - 03-27-2026, 04:34 PM



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