Four Quintillion Blows - edit
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(02-28-2026, 12:04 PM)johnnyjojo Wrote:  Greetings,  you have some great images here.
S1: Microscopic hammers falling
S2:  interlocking ninja spin-stars,
S3:  judo master throwing
then in final stanza not sure what is going on.
"One quintillion satin hammers" wut?
overall good writing.  keep it going.

JJJ
@johnyjojo - Thanks for the read and encouragement.  In the last stanza
the narrator looks out on all this lovely potential for painful downfalls if he even sets foot on it, and, being cowardly as well as imaginative, doesn't.
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Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by dukealien - 02-01-2026, 01:07 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - by milo - 02-01-2026, 02:44 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - by wasellajam - 02-01-2026, 08:28 PM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by dukealien - 02-02-2026, 06:09 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by milo - 02-02-2026, 06:19 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by wasellajam - 02-02-2026, 06:20 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by johnnyjojo - 02-28-2026, 12:04 PM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by dukealien - 03-01-2026, 05:06 AM
RE: Four Quintillion Blows - edit - by johnnyjojo - 03-01-2026, 10:33 AM



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