My love

[milo]

My love


T’was involuntary, can’t help myself
But I was lost the moment I saw you.
Though many years with me, yourself and I
But, still, I see half of my heart in you.
I stare into your adorable eyes,
Reflection in them revealing my gaze.
Dreaming, melting in the corner like ice.
Wishing the love is passionate like blaze.

The shimmering moonlight, suffice, it should, 
yet dazzling sunlight, that ingrate desires.
No torch in hand so he misunderstood.
In now’s platonic state, lies, he requires.

My whole heart, missing! Who has it with her?
I think I love you, I’m really not sure

I was trying to practice writing sonnets but this concept came to mind so i had to write about it
bad ryhme or meter may or may not have been conveniently intentional :p
might not be good practice to start poking holes in traditional structure without doing okay with it first though...

First - it's excellent practice to poke holes in traditional structures.

Really, I think the main issues here are you are trying to rely too much on traditional concepts of what you think love poetry should sound like.  You have things you want to say - you live in a modern world - you have felt love but you are writing things like:  "Wishing th elove is passionate like blaze"

Now I am not sure what type of feedback you would like here, we could work toward perfecting the grammar, the awkwardness, the meter the rhymes - thos are all easily fixable.  At then end you will have a poem - of sorts.  It won't be terribly interesting and noone will want to read it but we will have it.

Let me know which direction you would like to go.

Thanks for posting, dont be disparaged, I still remember my first sonnet, it was ghastly.