Silver Lining

[wizzpower]

Now I'm getting a clear feeling of "The world goes on without me, do I matter?"
The language is lovely, "dripping clouds dissolve"

Also, it's okay to bump a thread to announce a new edit if you are looking for addition crit.

Also idk why i didnt say this earlier but although it is nice that my poem has improved, do i matter wasnt really the effect i was going for. It was rather that being unable to find joy in the world through the weather despite how beautiful or comforting it is, and the speaker is just dismissing engaging amd finding that joy quickly. I had the idea of putting the quotations on the last line already but im not sure if it was too direct. I thought the repitition was enough but apparantly not. Do you think there are other ways to make this clearer and what makes the "do i matter" stand out more than my intended outcome? Though on the other hand i like the openess of it too...

So I've walked you through my read, not every reader gets the same thing out of a poem, my interpretation is my own.

was rather that being unable to find joy in the world through the weather despite how beautiful or comforting it is, and the speaker is just dismissing engaging and finding that joy quickly.

I'm not getting the joy, it reads as resignation for me, the N sees all the beauty but isn't part of it. I'll think about how you might get joy into it but really it's for you to figure how to express the narrator's joy, it's not an easy thing to pull off. I hope this answers your questions, keep at it.

I meant dismissing finding the joy in that sentence. my bad if it was unclear