Silver Lining

[wizzpower]

Just a lil short poem that i wrote to test the waters of this forum
I have written some poems already but id just like to post smth simple first

Silver lining

today is a cloudy day

the sun is obscured
the world is tinted gray
but i stay inside anyways

the stars are covered
dimming the night sky
but i was sleeping anyways

:edit: pretty new to this so messed up abit of formatting


I tired improving it. hopefully its better

Silver Lining

yesterday was a sunny day

the sky was void of clouds
sunbeams flooding the nearby fields
but i was going home anyways

today was a cloudy day

cool crisp air like a blanket
the world was tinted grey
but i was staying inside anyways

tonight is a rainy night

dripping clouds dissolve
unveiling the sparkling stars

tucked in my sheets
tossing and turning

but i was sleeping anyways

Now I'm getting a clear feeling of "The world goes on without me, do I matter?"
The language is lovely, "dripping clouds dissolve"

Also, it's okay to bump a thread to announce a new edit if you are looking for addition crit.

thanks for the comments

how do i bump a thread? in other platforms i often just reply to the message 
i dont create a new thread and link this old one or something right?