The second train of thought

[fastmarshmallow]

So, i improvise for you a poem
Whilst sitting here at home
Again this time
I write it in rhyme
Waiting for inspiration
That will unite every land and nation
I want world peace, thats all
I heard Gods call

Becuse, thats important to me
To live happy and free
Self development is the key
Against the powers that be
Also love, love and more love, you see
Im pouring my heart out
Thats what this is about

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Fun    what do yall think? I wrote with blood as my ink.

Hi Smiley, nice to see another fellow new poet in the Pen. Glad you're enjoying it as much as I am! I think what might help is if you choose one theme, concept or idea and let your poem revolve around that. Although tracing your train of thought can work at times, here it seems forced in for the sake of writing something. 

For instance, when you were making breakfast this morning, did the jam on your toast remind you of a gory painting you've seen? The ideas can be pretty basic - it's how your lines describe them that count.