Silver Lining

[Magpie]

Just a lil short poem that i wrote to test the waters of this forum
I have written some poems already but id just like to post smth simple first

Silver lining

today is a cloudy day

the sun is obscured
the world is tinted gray
but i stay inside anyways

the stars are covered
dimming the night sky
but i was sleeping anyways


:edit: pretty new to this so messed up abit of formatting

Hi wizz, welcome to the Pigpen this is a nice enough little ditty here with some nice rhymes.
Some might say that the title is a cliche especially when the poem mentions clouds.
If I were to be really pedantic I would ask how you knew it was cloudy when you were asleep, but it's no big deal.
Could you use 'today is a cloudy day' as a refrain and then change it to 'today was a cloudy day' at the end?

Just a couple of thoughts.

Cheers for posting