A train of thought

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it unfortunately seems abit boring to me but i can tell you had alot of fun writing this and i think having fun and enjoying the process is great and already makes you a poet
thought it seems abit childish(unless somehow intentional) and ryhme feels forced
though flow(just my vibes lol) isnt the worst. I believe you can do better! 

(As someone who writes poem, im somehow terrible at varying my tone so pardon me if i sound abit rude)

No worries. Yes, i shall try to improve!