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[Mic]

Hi Mic, this is interesting, very short. I'm not entirely sure of your meaning, there seems to be a lot of ambiguity here, intentional??

If I knew your intention I could give better critique. 

Is it saying, I looked into the eyes of my friend and saw no soul.

I first thought about dissection but the line 'opened lash-shuttered iris' seems to indicate opening some ones eyelid which is at odds with the first line in which you have an eyeball.

Iris has a lot of symbology attached to it.

Just a few thoughts,

Cheers for the read.

I'm trying to use the 'eyes are the window to the soul' to say if you only look at one aspect of someone/something it loses whatever it had as a whole. I've been trying to tweak the wording of the lines for a while and wanted to get fresh opinions on why exactly it isn't working.

Thanks for the critique