02-23-2026, 05:27 AM
Quote: I realise now looking at it that those two lines are ambiguous. I was going to say, 'laughed and loved' to indicate a relationship with someone that has since gone.
I did get that the other half of the "we" was gone. And ambiguous there is fine with me, it just reads a little awkward when if was
"Now I clamber a fallen
oak where we once laughed."
the reader can see it either way, the N the climber or the oak. As far as the big picture, I didn't get it but I think it's a good idea. Don't assume it's you and not me, so far I'm 0 for 2 today. Wait and see if someone else does better before messing with it. Maybe a title change or tweak in the beginning would have helped me.
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