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I like rhyme a ton - I am one of its biggest modern poetry champions.  The reason I suggested not rhyming is because you are forcing it and it makes the poem read mawkish.  The other suggestion would be to study and do rhyme well and that takes a lot longer and is a lot harder.  An intermediate step might be a two prong approach - explore enhancing your poetry skills without the crutch of rhyme while you learn to do rhyme well and incorporate it as you get better.

Yeah, i hear you. I appreciate all of the advices i get on this forum but to be clear, im not going for being a champion myself. I just, like writing poems and i have found that its a special feeling finding others poetry that speaks to me personally.

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And its kind of fun to get feedback from skilled people who know their stuff, but im not only after proffesional opinions.. i want to hear what everyone thinks.

you asked for feedback - I gave feedback - you don't ever have to do anything with it.  Also, who do you think is a professional?

Yes, and i appreciate it. Im just saying, dont expect to much from me. Who is a ”PRO”, it was mostly an expression defining someone who is really good att this.. someone like you as an example.