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Hello

it is good to see you stretching your wings here and trying something new.  Meta poetry is difficult to pull off as who wants to read a poem about writing poetry although it has been done with some success.  

I think you feel like you have to have rhyme when you really do not.  It might be better to think of something else in the world that is also a challenge like writing poetry.  Now give me that image and let me figure out how it works for you.  Try to use other interesting words that refer back (or point) to your main metaphor (bridge metaphor)

Thanks

Hey Milo!

I like to rhyme 

I like rhyme a ton - I am one of its biggest modern poetry champions.  The reason I suggested not rhyming is because you are forcing it and it makes the poem read mawkish.  The other suggestion would be to study and do rhyme well and that takes a lot longer and is a lot harder.  An intermediate step might be a two prong approach - explore enhancing your poetry skills without the crutch of rhyme while you learn to do rhyme well and incorporate it as you get better.

Yeah, i hear you. I appreciate all of the advices i get on this forum but to be clear, im not going for being a champion myself. I just, like writing poems and i have found that its a special feeling finding others poetry that speaks to me personally.

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And its kind of fun to get feedback from skilled people who know their stuff, but im not only after proffesional opinions.. i want to hear what everyone thinks.