A train of thought

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Im sitting alone at home
Thinking of a poem
Tryin to come up with something good
I want to be understood
So I search I align and allow
For inspiration to come to me but i dont know how
Touching something sacred and reaching for the soul
That is my point that Is my goal

Not lonely thou i am alone
Cuz we are all connected we are all one
So lets get it good lets have some fun
And melt like butter in the sun
Create and share
About that which we care
Im thinking world peace
Arriving with ease

Hello

it is good to see you stretching your wings here and trying something new.  Meta poetry is difficult to pull off as who wants to read a poem about writing poetry although it has been done with some success.  

I think you feel like you have to have rhyme when you really do not.  It might be better to think of something else in the world that is also a challenge like writing poetry.  Now give me that image and let me figure out how it works for you.  Try to use other interesting words that refer back (or point) to your main metaphor (bridge metaphor)

Thanks

Hey Milo!

I like to rhyme 

I like rhyme a ton - I am one of its biggest modern poetry champions.  The reason I suggested not rhyming is because you are forcing it and it makes the poem read mawkish.  The other suggestion would be to study and do rhyme well and that takes a lot longer and is a lot harder.  An intermediate step might be a two prong approach - explore enhancing your poetry skills without the crutch of rhyme while you learn to do rhyme well and incorporate it as you get better.