02-21-2026, 07:36 PM
Hi, busker, I've sat with this a while and have no suggestions. Some notes on my read:
(02-21-2026, 04:50 PM)busker Wrote: Australia DaySo, I like it as is, it's morning here and a lovely way to start the day. Thanks for posting it.
I see from my room
a purple jacaranda tree
in bloom, on a beach
in the coral sea.
This is a beautiful, clear image, then the beach IN the sea got me a little topsy-turvy, then became an island. I like that it sits slightly off for me.
Elsewhere, older fig trees grow,
where land retains the memory
of long ago and different names
for the native forest flames.
Older is very strong here. The old fig tree did a lot of work, took me on trip around the world, at first the Middle East, then my childhood backyard in NYC planted by Italian immigrants, then Italy, then Africa. All places where I have felt that retained memory the land holds. Then I finally remembered the Australian climate is probably perfect, not to mention the title lol. Thank you for not tying it down too firmly. I like that you didn't chuck names/flames due to the rhyme, which I didn't notice the first few reads. Evocative lines.
Or so I imagine it to be.
At first I applied this to the last five lines but then it overflowed to the first five and put a light fog over the whole poem.


