What Reckless Dreams

[milo]

Hello

It seems you've written a poem about the yearning for adventure/fulfillment/exploration.

I think it is very difficult to pull off using "Dreams" in the title of a modern poem and I don't think you succeeded here as it comes across as a cliche rather than a novel look at something.

What far-away land now beckons?
What beauty? What danger?
What subtle hope still lives?

So - all this chatter in the beginning of the poem will be annoying to the reader and they will start skimming.  You have asked 4 kind of tired question in a row  which all should be replaced with one powerful new observation/metaphor/question to really bring the reader in

We are well past such dreams as these.

As I mentioned - "dreams" in a modern poem is tough to pull off and you are just using it here in the cliche common way so it gives a reader the ick

Yet, upon a moment where dreams still plead for survival
And hope makes a desperate move to be seen,

dreams and now hopes too.  sigh.  This is not good.  All of this should be re-written with fresh language.  You have something you want to say, now think of an interesting way to say it.

Who will go? Who will try?
Who will believe, and then act?
What new beast shall be born when we, at last,
Full of passionate intensity, follow our reckless dreams to the stars?

sadly, it doesn't get better.

I would like to suggest trimming out all the fat but I think there would be maybe 4 words left. Sorry if this doesn't seem helpful.

Thanks for posting.