02-20-2026, 05:55 PM
The title initially throws people off because of the connection with Venus and then that seems to create a connection with Jupiter through Jove.
Jove could be changed to 'Father' but I think it spoils the poem because it becomes clear by the end that Jove is God.
Could the title be changed, especially considering that it is used within the poem to great effect.
Would 'Lucifer' be too obvious a title?
Light Bearer? Bringer of Light? -- Too cryptic
Just a couple of thoughts, the rest is excellent, although it requires some knowledge of the bible it reads well and makes sense, the last two strophes are particularly good.
Cheers for the read.
Jove could be changed to 'Father' but I think it spoils the poem because it becomes clear by the end that Jove is God.
Could the title be changed, especially considering that it is used within the poem to great effect.
Would 'Lucifer' be too obvious a title?
Light Bearer? Bringer of Light? -- Too cryptic
Just a couple of thoughts, the rest is excellent, although it requires some knowledge of the bible it reads well and makes sense, the last two strophes are particularly good.
Cheers for the read.
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