02-20-2026, 10:24 AM
edit2;
she smiles
and feeling so relieved for her
in that warm swift moment
I must cry except
it’s gone before my tears can well
then returning terror locks
her features tight
knowing only that she cannot
understand or put a name
to anything she sees
blessed smile again
alights dove-like
I want to turn away
before next fright
but can’t
alternation
not damnation
since neither deserved
nor endless
Tried it without S3 but the afterword seemed unmoored and the stanza grew back - hopefully showing more than telling? But S4 seemed abrupt as well as editorial. So a small bridge... and now S3 seems unnecessary again. Advice would be much appreciated.
she smiles
and feeling so relieved for her
in that warm swift moment
I must cry except
it’s gone before my tears can well
then returning terror locks
her features tight
knowing only that she cannot
understand or put a name
to anything she sees
blessed smile again
alights dove-like
I want to turn away
before next fright
but can’t
alternation
not damnation
since neither deserved
nor endless
Tried it without S3 but the afterword seemed unmoored and the stanza grew back - hopefully showing more than telling? But S4 seemed abrupt as well as editorial. So a small bridge... and now S3 seems unnecessary again. Advice would be much appreciated.
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