love, tolerance, and harm

[Mark A Becker]

Well hello shady-
the crit I'll offer is by subtraction, leaving parts I found interesting, without changing a word:

you shrink smaller
soften a bit

a hard-boiled egg, shell on.
i can not crack you open

you are magical--
a miraculous success

i am unrecognizable
the woman i am today

i hope you don't grow cold
in my shadow

in the end your faults, my anger,
your shame, my bitterness

kills it
kills.