Leaving Footprints (title change) edit

[wasellajam]

With trunks so wide my arms can’t reach around 
their girth, they stretch their massive limbs out towards
the gleaming lake to drink reflected light;        

Very quick comment after one read of the edit.  The italicized line above (remains?) out of IP.  If this is intended, for the "stretch" effect, for example, that's fine.  But it could conform, if desired, by either cutting "out" or moving "out" to present location of "they" (removing "they") which is already implied by "their." (...girth, stretch out their massive limbs towards)

(If I'm just reading this strangely, apologies!)

Other than that, the edits - particularly the stanza rearrangement - are very successful... including a stronger emphasis on the damage done.  The title change also clarifies the theme.

Sooo, I edited that line, which read poorly, but still, everything I can find has "towards" as one syllable, is that how it's pronounced where you are? I think maybe the "out" before it threw it off, does it read right to you now?