02-11-2026, 12:28 AM
Hello and welcome to the pen!
The turn comes though with the concept that even once cut and eaten, onions can regrow. This is a pretty positive turn.
As far as the mechanics - I don't think the title is doing you any favors though I guess it echoes the turn.
The poem itself, short as it is, could still be trimmed more. Also, the line breaks don't seem to be doing much work - looking specifically at the one on "to"
Anyway, thanks for posting
(02-10-2026, 12:56 PM)Mic Wrote: I Have the Rest of My Life to TryThis poem reads almost like an extended koan. I don't know if I just read it fast the first few times but it took me a minute to get it. It makes a pretty plain statement - "I am not good at cooking" - not confusing, easy enough, no sense reading too much into it. There are a lot of people who are not good at cooking which seems such a mundane yet fundamental human ability so to accept that one is not good at it is like saying - I am not a whole human. This could be seen as defeatist - giving up on being human.
I’m not good at cooking,
But I am at hoping
That the cuttings of onions
In half-full mugs
Will come back to
Give me another chance.
The turn comes though with the concept that even once cut and eaten, onions can regrow. This is a pretty positive turn.
As far as the mechanics - I don't think the title is doing you any favors though I guess it echoes the turn.
The poem itself, short as it is, could still be trimmed more. Also, the line breaks don't seem to be doing much work - looking specifically at the one on "to"
Anyway, thanks for posting