01-08-2026, 03:20 AM
I am searching long and hard for you, my little piggies, to find the Instapoetry you so crave.
Today, I have been diving deep into the deep deep works of Lang Leav. TBH - if you mixed most of Lang's poetry up with Rupi Kaur and forced me at gunpoint to separate them there is a possibility you would have to shoot me. Still here is a longer one I found:
LOSING YOU (By Lang Leav)
I used to think I couldn't go a day without your smile. Without telling
you things and hearing your voice back.
Then, that day arrived and it was so damn hard but the next was
harder. I knew with a sinking feeling it was going to get worse, and I
wasn't going to be okay for a very long time.
Because losing someone isn't an occasion or an event. It doesn't just
happen once. *It happens over and over again*. I lose you every time I
pick up your favorite coffee mug, whenever that one song plays on the
radio, or when I discover your old t-shirt at the bottom of my laundry
pile.
I lose you every time I think of kissing you, holding you, or wanting
you. I go to bed at night and lose you, when I wish I could tell you
about my day. And in the morning, **when I wake and reach for the
empty space across the sheet, I begin to lose you all over again.**
1. I can't figure out her rational for her linebreaks
2. I thin this poem is better than yesterday's because it makes usage of some imagery and metaphor rather than just exposition.
3. This poem does have an extended metaphor and attempts to stick to it.
4. This poem attempts to make use of bridge metaphor.
If this were posted to this site, I would note the nice feel of natural rhythm and encourage the writer to focus more on her metaphor and image, try to trim any unnecessary verbiage, fix her line breaks and trim any exposition ( this is the show don't tell advice - present me someone in the middle of loss, don't tell me someone is in the middle of loss)
Before anyone mentions it, yes, I am aware this poet is more successful than I could ever hope to be.
Today, I have been diving deep into the deep deep works of Lang Leav. TBH - if you mixed most of Lang's poetry up with Rupi Kaur and forced me at gunpoint to separate them there is a possibility you would have to shoot me. Still here is a longer one I found:
LOSING YOU (By Lang Leav)
I used to think I couldn't go a day without your smile. Without telling
you things and hearing your voice back.
Then, that day arrived and it was so damn hard but the next was
harder. I knew with a sinking feeling it was going to get worse, and I
wasn't going to be okay for a very long time.
Because losing someone isn't an occasion or an event. It doesn't just
happen once. *It happens over and over again*. I lose you every time I
pick up your favorite coffee mug, whenever that one song plays on the
radio, or when I discover your old t-shirt at the bottom of my laundry
pile.
I lose you every time I think of kissing you, holding you, or wanting
you. I go to bed at night and lose you, when I wish I could tell you
about my day. And in the morning, **when I wake and reach for the
empty space across the sheet, I begin to lose you all over again.**
1. I can't figure out her rational for her linebreaks
2. I thin this poem is better than yesterday's because it makes usage of some imagery and metaphor rather than just exposition.
3. This poem does have an extended metaphor and attempts to stick to it.
4. This poem attempts to make use of bridge metaphor.
If this were posted to this site, I would note the nice feel of natural rhythm and encourage the writer to focus more on her metaphor and image, try to trim any unnecessary verbiage, fix her line breaks and trim any exposition ( this is the show don't tell advice - present me someone in the middle of loss, don't tell me someone is in the middle of loss)
Before anyone mentions it, yes, I am aware this poet is more successful than I could ever hope to be.