Primitive Hope

[milo]

Primitive Hope

A life without stigma
would be a place
uncivilized.

So, I think this thought is really the best part of the poem.

Life - as a place.  I wonder how much that could be expanded on.  Perhaps make life a place the central metaphor and develop from there instead of moving on?

A living existence,
finding purpose being 
hypnotized.

Though,

what is true to me
is living tranquilized.

Truma blurs reality;
cooping clears conscientiousness.

Hoping one day my mind
won't have to be restrained. 

Mastering mentality
living without shame.

I also liked the uncivilized/hypnotized rhyme.

Thanks