Don't
#6
(11-07-2025, 08:47 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  My dad ran my songs through A.I.  Perfect meter in this line.  I love it.
without my permission.
I have to admit it made me cry
Hearing my words and chords with precision

Strings and flutes and vocal runs  Perfect meter in this line also.  But it's a different meter.  
An entire orchestra hitting me
in the stomach, I was done

My dad laughed and asked why
It's your song its your words just listen
It was so clean I wanted to die
Witnessing the actualization of my vision

Dreaming if id ever had the funds
An entire orchestra hitting you
In the soul,  knowing there's no one

I do love the sound of my voice, no lie
My forms and compositions
My inability to sing in key, i cant deny
Though the temptations  I don't understand this line.
Interesting subject matter.  But my personal inclination would be to perfect the meter and otherwise try to write it so that even a ten year old kid could immediately understand it.  
Reply


Messages In This Thread
Don't - by CRNDLSM - 11-07-2025, 08:47 AM
RE: Don't - by busker - 11-07-2025, 08:54 AM
RE: Don't - by CRNDLSM - 11-07-2025, 08:56 AM
RE: Don't - by Mostly Holy - 11-12-2025, 12:40 AM
RE: Don't - by CRNDLSM - 12-26-2025, 04:06 AM
RE: Don't - by evanbedford_dot_com - 12-27-2025, 09:53 AM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!