Reviewing the night

[milo]

Prize the new night ahead,
under neon’s cool moon-sky.

no complaints this far, line breaks are solid, moon-sky is nice in its efficiency.  Prize is an odd choice but not uncomfortably so

Our soft migrating urges,
still monkey-guided, confused.

Still efficient, still good use of line breaks, "migrating" feels like the wrong word.

Vin et chocolat, Ben?
At the table, tugging thoughts.
We’re practically alive,
cradle-mourning time.

"cradle-mourning" is another nice turn of phrase, both in it's economy and in it's contrast to what we have witnessed so far.  In classic italian poetry, this would be the volta, we have had the reveal and now perhaps discussion and resolution.  I don't know if "practically" alive is correct here or not, it has an off/alien feel to it, but if you consider the double meaning of practically/practically, it works to convey the feeling of a couple mourning the death of a child as both barely alive as well as only alive for practical functionality.

Oh sun, abate your eye-
crude, reeking servant.
Nighttime, my vivid cavity,
linger raw among us.

So the tone does change here which makes sense following the volta, with "Oh" alluding to more classical poetry serving as apostrophe.

I have so far enjoyed your odd turns of phrase but I must protest to the sun being described as reeking.

Ben - claws or cleaver now?
Our sun has lost entitlement.
His last cues, unclear still,
yet echo in my ears.

This last part is lost on me.  In addition, the efficiency and line breaks are not as good here.  Is "still" pulling its weight?  In addition, I don't think you need the anthropomorphism of the sun

overall, a pleasant read

Thanks