Fall's Lament(edit)

[whisperer]

I love this! Your direct and indirect comparison of losing summer to fall to the losing of a love. Beautiful! I even enjoyed the image of barren trees reaching desperately hungry for the promised warmth. The reflective ending is a little too prose for the rest of the piece. Bring that same imagery into the ending and drop some of the cliche language and you have something. Can't wait to see the edit. Thanks for sharing.